Freedom

snoopy-the-endYesterday I wrote a short story.  If you keep up with Chuck Wendig, you’ll know he does a Flash Fiction Friday event.  The challenge this week is to write a complete story in three sentences.  I took my time, I thought up a nice little story, and I posted it in the comments of the post, just like the directions said, and hit submit.

Naturally, that was when I noticed that I used the same word twice in one sentence, even though I’d intended to use a different one.

*sigh*

*facepalm*

*headdesk*

*rageface*

Okay, now that I’m done abusing my cranial area (for the moment, anyway), would you like to read said story?  You would?  Yay!  Here ’tis, complete with word correction:

It had taken Rue fifty years to tell her side of the story, but at last she’d finished it – her work was done.  It was a good thing, too, because she was very nearly out of blood.  She took one last, long look at the grimy stone walls of her cell, satisfaction dripping from her smile as her gory fingers ceased writing, knowing that freedom was finally hers, and closed her eyes.

Brevity is not my strong suit, but I think this works.  Feel free to tell me if I’m wrong (but then also please feel free to suggest ways I might improve it).

(c) 2014.  All rights reserved.

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13 thoughts on “Freedom

  1. writingbothsides says:

    This is excellent. Friday Fictioneers got me hooked on 100 word shorts (based on a photo prompt), so I’m always interested in reading flash by other writers. I like the idea of a story in three-sentences. You’ve crafted three powerful ones. Really nice job.

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    • Kay Kauffman says:

      Thank you! A hundred words for a flash piece is really a challenge. I think the shortest flash pieces I’ve written (aside from this one) were 416 words long, and the unusual word count was related to a competition being run on authonomy at the time. My story didn’t win the contest, but a bunch of us wrote horror-themed stories and then collected them into an anthology. That was a lot of fun – there were so many other fantastic stories!

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