Sun vs. Snow Critique Workshop

The Sun vs. Snow Contest just ended, and now the ever-lovely Michelle Hauck is running a Sun vs. Snow critique workshop ahead of upcoming contests!  Isn’t she just the best?

Since I’m still revising, I didn’t enter Sun vs. Snow, or any of the other contests that have come and gone over the last few months, even though I reeeally wanted to enter a couple.  But I’m two-thirds of the way through the revision (I think), so I thought, why not?  It’ll soon be time to start polishing, so why not get a little feedback on the beginning?

You can find Michelle’s post and all the details on the workshop here.  It’s open till the 21st, so there’s still time to enter if you’ve got something you’d like feedback on.  In the meantime, here’s my entry: